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"what I Would Give"...what's Yours?

Posted by Deremiah *CPE on 12/31/2004 at 8:56 PM ET 689 Points

This is your opportunity to get your poem thingy in. Yeah I know you're probably wondering what is he talking about. Well I'm talking about your new years poem. You don't have one...you got to be joking! If you want to be real successful in this life you've got to have word plays of some sort. Move over Eminem and stop playing games Usher it's time for the KHE crew to do a nursery rhyme.

We're taking two four or more verses. The only criteria is it's got to be original (no borrowed stuff) we cant' afford to pay any ones lawyers or royalties.

Well here's mine...where's yours?

What I would give... byderemiah (revised)

What I would give
to have a few,
two-3-four or why not
if I could take 5 more dozen friends like you.

What I would give.....just let it be,
More water than the ocean,
More sky than you could see,
More rocks than the mountains,
More currents than the sea,
What I would give,
yeah what I would give
for 4 more dozen friends like you.

What I would give....hmmmm well let me see,
If their as true as you
it wouldn't take a whole army, to set me free.
What I would give.....yeah-h-h from my account
I wouldn't think twice to withdraw the whole amount
What I would give
to have a few
"True Blue" friends in my pocket just like you, what I would give

More waters than the oceans,
More sky's than you could see,
More rocks than all the Mountains
More currents than every sea,
What I would give,
yeah what I would give
for 3 more dozen friends like you.

What I would give.....hmmmm well let me think,
More red than a cardinal
More Flamingo than the Pink
More pounds than an elephant
More thoughts than I can think
What I would give,
yeah what I would give
for 2 more dozen friends like you.

As my mind
makes the connection I soar to another link
Another thought of what I would give
If only the heavens would let me think
What I would give ,
yeah what I would give
for 1 more dozen friends like you.

What I would give....hmmmm...maybe birth
to visions never seen or
imagined throughout the earth
More Flamingo's than all the oceans,
More Elephant's than the skys,
More thoughts than all the Mountains,
More tears than seas could cry,
What I would give,
yeah what I would give
for 1, yeah only o-n-e more friend like you.

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Posted by Peter (henna gaijin) on 12/31/2004 at 10:44 PM Accepted

Points of six hundred eighty nine
I expect that none will be mine
As I don't know how to write poems well
Actually, sometimes it seems I can't spell

For a poetic response, am I in the mood?
Even knowing that this won't be any good
But at least this poem is not sappy
May everyone's New Year be happy!
Posted by Deremiah *CPE on 1/1/2005 at 1:31 PM Author

Peter (henna gaijin) it's hard to tell,
you're the only answer
and yours is well.
689 is in your grasp
pray all other's
come in last.
Please don't worry
never fret,
hope your response
is THe LAST I GET.
Posted by Pepper Blue on 1/1/2005 at 1:45 PM Accepted

To write a poem is nothing new
And 689 points is quite a few
But this is the year 2005
which less 689 is 1316, that's no jive

But numbers really don't mean a thing
Unless your counting friends
Friends with whom you can sing

Friends with whom you count your blessings
Or eat a big turkey dinner, with all the dressings

With that I wish you all a happy year
and good luck with your marketing tools and gear!
Posted by Pepper Blue on 1/1/2005 at 1:53 PM Accepted

A double post by Deremiah
But the other has 689 points, that is higher

Still, it gives me another chance
To wear again my poeming pants

I have my resolutions in place
Now, I wait for chance or faith
and hard work, diligence and the opportunities I make
To build my business stake by stake

To make 2005 a great year
And to the KHE I say cheers!
Posted by Deremiah *CPE on 1/1/2005 at 2:49 PM Author

PEPPER BLUE
here's to you,
no hang-over
what did you do.
I could imagine you
stayed up all night,
to make sure your poem
popped off... RIGHT?
Well it's pretty good
but don't DIS-count PETER,
;] SHELLEY's coming shortly
and it's got to be Sweeter.
She's got smooth skills & a golden heart,
I call her *Pretty Smart, that's what sets her apart.
with her Copy-writing skills you better go check-it,
pack up your biz, cuz she's bound-to-reck it!
JBTRON's the Don Juan of Branding.
when he drops his rhyme,
write the check for a Million,
cash in your blue chips and rake in a Billion.
That's "Mr. Berkowitz"...
The Branding aficionado with all the hitz.
Now you better watch out
cause it's hard to tell,
the artistic,
poetic,
business savvy of the
woman called Michele,
her word plays are heavy, like a 57 Chevy.
Brains like Einstein acute for brainstormin',
executes a business plan like an upper-cut
from George Forman,
as your poorly thought out business ideas
are fallin flat to the mat,
You'll need Val the Moderator to bring your stuff back.
Posted by Deremiah *CPE on 1/1/2005 at 3:05 PM Author

CHECK THE CAM FIRST
(before you make your first move)

Rockyboy2,
here's to you.

Check the cam first
before you make your first move.
I said...
Check the cam first
before you make your first move.

Check the cam first
before you make your first move Cuzz...
A girl might be a guy
even though the rapp is smooth.

When you're young at heart
don't get HOT on the NET.
Sometimes words said softly,
will make a man sweat.
But voices on the net can never
be seen...
till you hook-up your cam and there goes your dream.
So before you start macking and getting your groove,
CHECK THE CAM FIRST
(before you make your first move)
Check the cam first
(before you make your first move)

Well I could say more
but it's best if you rehearse.
Never use the internet to "Quench yo Thirst"
Posted by Deremiah *CPE on 1/1/2005 at 3:19 PM Author

Pepper Blue,
I know 125 points just won't do.
but click to the other 689
add them together and start your rhyme.
If this is not enough give me a jingle,
send you my tape,
and you can shout BINGO!
Use what is said
to get ahead.
If that won't get it, I can be your coach,
wire me the check or send a diamond broach.
I'm sure I can sell it on Ebay,
coach you once a week and see what your friends say.
If they like how your progressing
refer them to me,
I've been called Dr. Phil or Mr. CPE
The "ONLY" Customer Passion Evangelist
from sea to shining sea.

I wish you the best in 2005
but I'm always here for you and that's "NO JIVE"
Posted by SRyan ;] on 1/1/2005 at 3:22 PM Accepted

I offer Haiku
So sad, as I wash and fold
Two loads of laundry
Posted by Peter (henna gaijin) on 1/2/2005 at 3:18 PM Accepted

Urgent, this question is!
What reason for the marketing biz?

As to why, that I am not yet sure
Maybe CPE was drunk and on the floor?

As this is the holiday party season...
But maybe that is not the reason?

Because Deremiah at that time
Was able to make his post rhyme

And this rhyming style I could not think
If I had more than a touch to drink

Maybe he wanted to make a statement
in making this post urgent

Whatever the reason, I won't make a stink
As this question sure makes us think...
Posted by Blaine Wilkerson on 1/2/2005 at 7:31 PM Accepted

Roses are blue
Violets are red
Such are the perceptions
Stuck in my head

As the matter takes fire
From the chemical force
Dreams give birth
To a powerful source

Of what will become
And when we will be
One flowing river
Many a fruitful tree.
Posted by Deremiah *CPE on 1/2/2005 at 11:27 PM Author

Val,
I'm impressed
with your courage to try,
your first go, has a flow
and KHE is the reason why.
By next year you will grow.

Michele why you have to hurt'em?
we should never let you flow.
once you start the word plays rollin', everyone will know.
from here to South Africa their sayin'
"Man That Girl Can GO!"

Now I've got to study hard
pay my coach girl that's not funny,
When I let you star the show,
I'm bound to lose some money!

But Thanks for making me the Chairman,
of the only Michele's Fan Club,
While Peter's trying to
ruin my rep saying I was drunk on the rug.

Wait a minute Peter,
I thought you were my friend.
your chance to win the 689
is at "ZERO" once again.

So now you've got to work your way up
and Jett is in the game,
trying to attack, and make a comeback,
I nearly forgot his name.

Well "Welcome JETT"!
we're glad to hear you're alive and doin well,
I hope this does not mean that you,
don't have nuthin' to sell.

Where is Amandavega, and Jim Deveau,
Vevolution and telemoxie,
are they lost in space in 2005,
And do I have to stand in proxy.

Well I can rhyme all day and night
good night, Guten Abend to all,
Time for me & Cinderella to dance
were going to have a Ball.
Posted by Deremiah *CPE on 1/3/2005 at 7:57 AM Author

Well Shelley,
I'm glad Haiku
is the best you can do.
Washing and folding is not so sad,
imagine no clothes for you and your princess,
I really think that would be twice as bad.
Two loads of laundry could be four or five,
no money,
no water,
no washing machine,
would make it much harder to survive.

So I've told you before
Now I tell you again,
you were born for Great Things,
created to WIN.
No one smiles like you and I ain't lying
you're one of a kind, Ms. Shelley...sryan ;]
My number one Soul Sistah from Texas,
driving a PINK LIMOUSINE...made by LEXUS.
Posted by Deremiah *CPE on 1/3/2005 at 8:18 AM Author

I like your cool style Jillc,
bringing joy to all you meet
I like what you would give,
may nothing bring you defeat

"WHAT I WOULD NEED" byderemiah 6:22 am 1-3-04

Your philosophy could set some free,
I can see that yes in deed,
All you would give
would be all I would take,
If that was all I need.
But so much more I need in life
I can not began to tell,
But if it began with love and ended with sweetness,
I
would
never
fail.
Cause the key to life
has many locks
peace and compassion are two,
but if you could give what I would need
love forever remains true.
All other things would become a lie
the things the marketers yell,
But if you could give what I would need
that thing I'd never sell,
or tell,
from the very tip... of heaven
to the very bottom...of hell,
All would come a runnin'
trying to get just what you GOT.
If you could give me what I would need
that would be a lot,
so hot,
I'd trot
to the ends of the earth and back again to get just what you got.
Posted by Deremiah *CPE on 1/3/2005 at 11:33 PM Author

forecast you might think I'm crazy
but you better not fret,
cuz when Val see's your
joints she'll be cashing in your checks.
While Jim-bo's rolling
and he must be living fine,
Kickin' out a gutsy rapp,
proud to be a friend of mine.
almost smoother than butter,
hey where's the pecan,
Yes he's blowin' out the lyrics
like he's been to Vi-et-nam.
We'll be working together turn our youth into sensations,
as we touch the top 30 U-ni-ver-si-ties across the nations.
www.GraduateBusinessFoundation.org
if you want to come and feast it's a hip smorgesborg
Jim's the founder & Da-man of this,
crazy master plan.
Now I'm pumpin' weights ta hang
so my body can be strong.
Cuz if you're hanging with our youth
you better have it goin' on.

So you can see I want to give,
now can you give-it-back.
I'm goin back to Indiana
where the next conference is at.
Posted by SRyan ;] on 1/4/2005 at 6:10 AM Accepted

i can't get away with my haiku?
but i don't think i can rhyme like you!

perhaps if i write like e.e. cummings
it will ignite some brainy hummings.

i'm strangling my mouse
while jangling my keys
and mangling my words
by fandangling this cheeze.

hugs to you, doctor d,
and the KHE crowd
who don't mind those threads
where i'm thinking out loud.

this bad exercise
of my knuckles and joints
ain't poetic license
just to earn points.

speaking of points,
is there any to this?
apparently not, so...
i'll end with a kiss!

: ¤
Posted by SRyan ;] on 1/4/2005 at 6:52 AM Accepted

Forgot to warn you that I broke my Iambic Pentameter...

- Shelley ;]
Posted by Deremiah *CPE on 1/4/2005 at 1:41 PM Author

Jose 04 this is for you

I'm With You----------byderemiah 1-5-04 11:44 am

Love
Over
War

Makes me think
Make me ponder
Makes me wonder

I'm ELECTRIFIED
What I gave
Why I gave it
Who gave it back

It's a natural HIGH
In the end
I've got friends
we all win

This I can't DENY
Can't you see
The inner me
The inner you

Makes me Wanna CRY
we are one
we are free
we are family

"I GOT U BABY"
We are Life
We are Love
We are Soul

We are VICTORY
Posted by Deremiah *CPE on 1/5/2005 at 12:34 AM Author

Michele, come in com 1, (here's one back-at-cha)

Fantasy's First Party.........byderemiah

Danz floors waking my
legs been sleeping, peepin' songs
on the hi-fi spinning.

Feel my step comin back
in order as my toes see the beats
of James Brown's Funky Mother
Pop your good thang.

It's Funk-a -liscious grooves revolving
In seismic rotations as
Rolling beats dance on my spinal
Column all the way down to
My cosmic head bobbin as I’m
Aroused by the rhythms of my heart.

Partners singing cel-li-rific tunes
That make me…
break off a rusty vibration of passion
that causes everyone in the room to
recognize the camel like hump
in my back as I dancewalk all the way down to the end
of the Soul Train line.

My mind is engulfed
lost in the whispering tracks
of midnight's steamy days
while night lights are breaking
through the blacklite glow-in the dark posters
hidden on top of colorful blue,
purple people rapped in maroon.

Black guys dancing with Brown girls
Jamin with white girls bumpin with
Yellow guys trying to look like Prince
In Purple Zodiac signs no medallions
Making screaming walls jump-in and out
as the light switches shout "Make it Funky"
and it is Funkier than ever as
sweaty bodies in pumpernickel parties
jump closer and closer together.

Robust rhythmic rompins on the
pulsating dance floor jumpin-up and down
causing vibrations to feel the nations
of lovebirds lost in a world of fantasy’s first party.
Posted by Deremiah *CPE on 1/5/2005 at 12:40 AM Author

Shelley,

Excellent job on your rappin rhyme sensation. You've now went beyond the world of Haiku into the world of free flowing poetree. Great job.

Diggin your new word
Excitement as you
Roll off
Extremely great lyrics
Mimicking ee in three-D
I can't believe you went there
Although I am impressed in your
Heavenly go at something new I knew you could do
Posted by Deremiah *CPE on 1/8/2005 at 10:15 PM Author

Thinkmor 4 Thoughts..............by Deremiah, 8:40

Thinkmor,
who could have thought more than you.
Thinking of others,
till your thoughts turned true.
is a great way for brothers,
friends and family, loved ones and others.
To move into a thought provoking down pour.
What a name and a time for,
Thinkmor.

Now you got me thinking
as my thoughts race cross the floor.
The power of my thoughts,
open every shut door.
Cause men and women to review what I said,
A word creates pheno-mental thoughts,
excitement electro-stimulates in the head.
Energy like light synergistic movement flow-tates,
releasing conditions brought by "worry" freeing peace "can't waits".
Gravitational vibrations send sensations cross nations,
without cell-phones, words I release like Skype,
interchanging causing those who think again on my words to act hype.
Like a junky thinks thoughts for a chance at crack pipes.
Steal bills, for real thrills, without ever giving thought of missed meals.
Who said you can't get caught in a thought war,
failed to review the thoughts of thinkmor.

And anyone else I've thought geniune thoughts for,
lost control felt a release in the soul as my words hit bold.
My words cover more flesh than a blanket covers cold.
Take my words or advice or you might go naked,
Some who didn't listen like a car out of control wrecked it.
And if you think the thoughts that I'm thinking and feelin the words that I'm saying then you're locked in the *CPE zone as your mind starts prayin.
can you really understand a single word that I'm sayin.

Innoculated by the words that I just shared with you on
the phone,
Causing you to think thoughts over and over a meditational zone.
It will probably be better if you just went to sleep cause the man they call the Doctor just gave a prescription,
Did you dig what I said as you read my transcription
Posted by Deremiah *CPE on 1/12/2005 at 9:11 PM Author

Jose, 04,
you gave much more
than I could ever expect.
Keep on doing,
in doing keep on
until your life is formed perfect.
Posted by Deremiah *CPE on 1/12/2005 at 9:12 PM Author

Fragrant O'dear............byderemiah

Ivy,
poetic,
powerful,
muscles on motorcycles,
breaking bikers attention.
See my
motor
cycle rider,
rise from Canadas snow.
up the mountains
down the valleys
---------go motor bike go
--------fragrances and bath bombs
------explode to errupt my
-----atmosphere
----you're near
---it's clear
--Ivy's
-near
hear
her
softly
speak words of
Rhapsodies lyrical
spherical, a human miracle
---in motion
------dropping love potion
-----------------softly in lotion
---------------------------let it rain heavenly dew
-------------------------------------yes Ivy it's you.
Posted by Deremiah *CPE on 1/26/2005 at 12:58 AM Author

Well there comes a time in every man's life when he has to take all his poems and yes write a book of poetry. If you would like to participate with me please let me know? When Sryan ;] tells you to do something you better listen or else she'll yank you from Saint Charles, Illinois all the way down to Houston Texas and that's a lot of.....having to apologize to Ms. Ryan. Thanks everyone and I hope you enjoy the points too.

Your Servant, Deremiah, *CPE

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